I would say that the structure of your song is quite sound, however I'd suggest maybe changing a few things up to add variation and to keep the listener interested. Maybe add some more ear candy in the breaks.
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That was quite a nice intro, I think maybe a little less sidechain would be better as it would give that vibe which is more laidback, whih you want in the intro. The break is really nice, maybe a little less bass. I like build with the faded drop and strings. Drop has really nice chords and is well mixed, some nice perc hits happening.